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This...well, I can't really offer an opinion on it because some of the words you used in here turned me off. But trying really hard to be open minded (breathing ...

You know, I usually would reprimand you for making such long stanzas that were so seemingly unstructured, or by incorporating a language but you fixed both of these flawing aspects ...

You know what a poem is and how to write one. But you attempt to conquer such strong aspects of life (or life itself) in a sort of...rambling structure. I ...

I thought this was a bit awkward in some places, but basically the freeverse was outstanding and the ending perfect. The only objection I have was that you dragged out ...

thinking things are what they're not this line sounds awkward God you're beautiful God, you're beautiful. I must admit, I hate haiku, too, so I can't voice a proper opinion. ...

First of all, this was very..pretty. I loved it all, except this: there is nothing like staring dead i mean, c'mon...you're better than this. it's like a play on words ...

What's with all the monkey faces? Moving on - Don't judge me with just one glance, This girl laughs, and this girl crys, But I will spread my wings and ...

but than you cant but then you can't Grammatial, spelling and punctuation related flaws in this poem distracted me. Clean it up next time. I believe you have something with ...

1) you need punctuation 2) you need a rhythmic pattern that fits with the rhyming pattern GOOD THINGS: you know your poetry well, as you have a feel for it, ...

The regular morbid child's poem. Minor suggestions: These things they did for a day more, to live and make it through. i just didn't get this. and was too smart ...

I believe this is more suited in a prayer or chant than as a "poem". You seem to be overcome by emotion, sprouting sort of bland examples of horrible things ...

nuts and bolts trail her every trail um...overuse of the word "trail" and you used the term "mechanical bride" too much. it was poetic to begin with, but then you ...

This isn't really...a poem . It's basically something with line-breaks. How about metaphors? More meaning? Some similies? Rhythm, perhaps? The feelings you had behind this were developed, but now you ...

Hah. :lol: i really enjoyed this. And two at a time you dirty girl! :D

I was about to make a very rare long critique and then Brian stole it. :( I read through the entire thing, and I agree with him completely, so now ...